ok skimming through to refresh my thoughts on it: there's pretty much zero build up between harry and draco and zero conflict about them just immediately starting to fuck. which you can get me to believe if it's been years post-graduation and i can imagine there was reconciliation and growth prior to the fic, but for ones that take place in 8th year, i feel that we need to see it! i also don't love when harry is like smooth sex god dirty talk king top right away lol. he's an 18 year old dork.

worldbuilding wise, i'm also nitpicky about wizarding family norms, if that makes sense... so the actual premise is off to me because a) the skirts are a movie invention, b) pureblood wizard gender norms are probably different and i think it would require muggle knowledge for pansy to think of a skirt as an embarrassing punishment, and i definitely don't think draco would just up and wear a thong for sexy reasons alsdkjsdf. but this is nitpicky and something i do put a side for a lot of fic (i have a lot of thoughts on how wizard gender/sexuality would have developed prior to muggle contact and very few fics line up with it)